Feedback for Draft #2

I got some feedback from class, here is what i bullet pointed:

• people like the asylum scene
• asylum scene and silent film scene tell a story; one is before the other (I never thought of this. I always viewed them as two completely different scenes, but hey I'll go with it)
• too much mime (sir had questioned this before aswell, but I like the mime scene so much since I always had an idea of what I wanted for it and I choreographed it and everything - maybe I'll take out/shorten the suitcase bit)
• nice costumes
• needs more colour and colour grading
• someone also said that the outside bit doesn't really fit - but then I'm past caring what other people think now because we all know that I'm always right... right? I mean come on though, if I had more mime or asylum or silent film it would be repetitive! It adds to the star image! It represents the rock-y guitar bit at the end! It fits! I'm telling you it fits goddamit!